Sunday, December 19, 2021

Sevenling: Owl In The Night

 
 

 
 
 
 
 Sevenling: Owl In The Night



Owl in the night
mouse in the grass
wind behind wide wings

like my own heart I feel you fly
my voice a mouse-cry
as wide wings beat the light from

the moon to my eye.



December 2021
 
 
 

 
 
 
posted for Fireblossom
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Note on sevenlings if you haven't met one before: "The sevenling is a poem of seven lines inspired by the form of [a].. much translated short verse by Anna Akhmatova (1889 - 1966)...The first three lines should contain an element of three - three connected or contrasting statements, or a list of three details, names or possibilities..lines four to six should similarly contain an element of three connected directly or indirectly or not at all..The seventh line should act as a narrative summary or punchline or as an unusual juxtaposition..A sevenling should be titled Sevenling followed by the first few words in parentheses The tone of the sevenling should be mysterious, offbeat or disturbing, giving a feeling that only part of the story is being told.."~Roddy Lumsden
 
 
 
 
 
 
Images: Owl and Moon, ©Alan Perry All Rights Reserved Fair Use
birdperson image author unknown via Sunday Muse Fair Use
 

6 comments:

  1. Oh! This starts out so softly, then knocks me over at the end. I felt the hook go into my own heart when I got to "like my own heart I feel you fly." The seventh line does just what you've said the seventh line should do, in your excellent explanation of what a sevenling is, and consists of. Honestly, I can't wait to write one now. This is all just excellent, Thank you.

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  2. I love the comparison here of the heart and the owl at night. The closing line is an utterly amazing close to a magnificent sevenling Joy! Gorgeous!!

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  3. Joy ... this is so lovely. Sevenling is such a 'pleasing to the senses' poetry form ... Sigh.

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  4. You surely succeeded at this: "The tone of the sevenling should be mysterious, offbeat or disturbing, giving a feeling that only part of the story is being told.." I hope the mouse isn't mesmerized into the clutches of the owl!

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  5. "Owl in the night
    mouse in the grass
    wind behind wide wings"

    that's a haiku in and of itself. love the image you paint here, the relationships of nature here. kind of makes me sad though, i'm going to miss an entire ice fishing season, a whole winter stuck here away from my mountains and away from my critters. i'm so depressed

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"We make out of the quarrel with others, rhetoric, out of the quarrel with ourselves, poetry." ~William Butler Yeats