Friday, November 19, 2010

Dental Work







Dental Work


Closing my eyes
In the summer night
Clouds of gnats swirl up
Against the black.

I have no tattoos
Just some gold
To mark a place
And put a smile
Where something crumbled.

I live in hope
That when we tire
Of feeling sorry for ourselves
We’ll finally begin
To pity each other.


November 2010




55 words (including the title) for my friend Shay's friend, G-man, and his Friday Flash 55 word challenge


11 comments:

  1. A 55 with definite bite! LOL ;)

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  2. I can pity you, if it will make you feel any better. (LOL!) Interesting 55!

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  3. Hedgewich...?
    WOW!!!
    I see that like Shay...The cream always rises to the top!
    This was fantastic!
    Loved your poem/55.
    I hope that you found this to be challenging, creative, and FUN!
    Thanks for playing, please join us again, and have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

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  4. interesting thoughts in this 55 words..and i won't pity you...no need...still feel sorry for myself...smiles (don't take me serious...)

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  5. nice...put a smile where something crumbled...aww...nice 55..

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  6. Great 55! I'm not one for the dentist, but beautifully conveyed!

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  7. Thanks all. And thanks to the G-man for the set-up--this was a great challenge to me--I've only recently learned how to say something on twitter in 140 characters--now you want 55 words! But it was fun, and I'm sure it was good for me. I suffer badly from the tl;dr (too long;didn't read) syndrome. ;-)

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  8. love your 55.
    Glad to see you play.
    keep it up.

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  9. Uh ohh... gold fillings.. "things" crumbling.. I am getting the CREEPS!!!
    And to think I'm writing this WHILE munching on a Milky Way bar! :)

    Very nicely penned though!!! :)

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'Poetry is an echo asking a shadow to dance' ~Carl Sandburg