Un Bee Leafable
If
you were here
and we were young, if
time twitched and turned inside out,
but
bees
can't pollinate coral reefs,
you'll never be here
and we’re not
young.
October 2011
Posted for Sunday Mini-Challenge at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads
This is my attempt at a mirror oddquain, described as : A two stanza form with syllable sequence 1-3-5-7-1 1-7-5-3-1 = 32 syllables, with some kind of opposition between the two parts.
And this is the poem before it was formed up, just for comparison:
Nonsense Song
If you were here
and we were young
If time would twitch
and turn inside out
If bees could pick pollen
from coral reefs
If water were chocolate
and chocolate lovesongs
If birds sang Puccini upside down
If the night went on an extended cruise
and learned to samba, in red
ruffled dress and heels,
if bats could talk and tell how it was done, that
they left their mouseholes and learned to fly
then you’d be here my love,
and we’d be young.
September 2011
