Sunday, August 21, 2016

Mistakes


Mistakes





Dark flutters
words melted like butter
burn the tongue, her hand on your shoulder 
on a night from which every dream has been wrung
I looked for your face but it was wrong,
wrong for me to come here
with my snakes

wrapped around
the sad mistakes truth makes.






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Note: This is a triquain, (a seven line poem with syllables of 3-6-9-12-9-6-3) to which I have arbitrarily added a final couplet (3-6.)





Optional Musical Accompaniment







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9 comments:

  1. "the sad mistakes truth makes": How it's so that life is a series of things that happen to us. A lone path or a junction where we meet; everything is inundated with the morose stink of reality where sadness and truth have coalesced and deception is sweet.
    A powerful write.
    -HA

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  2. Truth as a snake... I love the idea of the bites, and how it wrung the dreams.. (or wrong them even)... This could be my consciousness whisper the unwelcome words even.

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  3. That final couplet adds a cracker of a finale! There is something about owning one's snakes that makes a powerful statement.

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  4. "...the sad mistakes truth makes" really strikes my heart with its accuracy. I love "a night from which every dream has been wrung." I recognize this landscape.

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  5. Snakes wrapped around the mistakes truth makes, like a strange caduceus for the lovesick. Sometimes it is so hard to know what's right or best to do in a situation and that goes double when it's about the heart. This is like a thimble of bitter medicine; required, not necessarily helpful, like a dunning for ever having cared.

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  6. Thank you for this haunting journey into a reality

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  7. I love how you dance with the word "wrong". How it can be his face, or her search, or both... It gives the poem a sense of eeriness that goes deep, deep, deep...

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  8. Truth can bring its own venom. There is such pain when the heart must walk in the dark.

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  9. Caduceus, where art thou? Sinuous and deft, both. That final couplet stays with me ~

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'Poetry is an echo asking a shadow to dance' ~Carl Sandburg