Thursday, January 27, 2011

Snow Go



Snow Go

Snow sparrows shy from the black
unnatural rubber of the car on iced asphalt.
Winter throws softballs against the glass,
trees seem to bend away in the distance
wishing the snow that blankets the road
could hide it, block it
and let their secret world continue
without my car, my fumes, my noise, my uselessness.




January 2011






Also posted for Friday Flash 55 fiction at the G-man's

Posted for Magpie Tales #50

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34 comments:

  1. Other MaryJanuary 27, 2011 at 11:01 AM

    Oh very good Hedgewitch! So, the arrow is a big 'exit stage right' for human 'progress.'

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 27, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    Feels just like riding in a car in winter. The "softballs" against the glass, the snow sparrows. Love your last line.

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  3. Maude LynnJanuary 27, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    What a gorgeous interpretation of the picture!

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  4. Tess KincaidJanuary 27, 2011 at 11:34 AM

    I adore the notion of winter throwing softballs. Very nice.

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  5. FireblossomJanuary 27, 2011 at 1:23 PM

    Strange driver in a strange land? I don't think the auto club probably has a solution for this sort of breakdown. Loved the ride, dear Witch.

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  6. TrulyfoolJanuary 27, 2011 at 3:01 PM

    Joy,

    This is delectable!

    Yeah. Nature to 'us': go away.

    Trulyfool

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  7. FrikoJanuary 27, 2011 at 3:32 PM

    Hedgewitch, true to your name, you wish to magic the car away from nature, the forests, the purity of the world outside our little mechanical lives.

    Your poem works because it tells me what I want to hear.

    Lovely. Thank you for visiting; I hope to see more of you.

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  8. FelicitasJanuary 27, 2011 at 4:14 PM

    This is a really lovely and thoughtful piece! We really do, too often, make ourselves an intrusion upon nature, instead of opting to be one with it.

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  9. MaggieJanuary 27, 2011 at 4:25 PM

    I love the first line. Wonderful, wonderful.

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  10. UnknownJanuary 27, 2011 at 4:27 PM

    this was a trip :) loved the trees...I could almost see them rolling their knotholes as you rode by.

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  11. Always WriteJanuary 27, 2011 at 4:28 PM

    Saw your name on Fireblossom's great site

    Nature gets the raw end of the deal

    Yes I'd like to tell the snow where to go...

    Nice to meet you

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  12. Dulçe ♥January 27, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    Great magpies fumes and snow... amixture that makes and great verse!

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  13. SheilaJanuary 27, 2011 at 5:24 PM

    this is a wonderful change in point of view from our view of nature to nature's view of us. Awesome - love it - esp. for its originality :)

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  14. Tumblewords:January 27, 2011 at 10:36 PM

    A great Magpie!

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  15. JinksyJanuary 28, 2011 at 6:54 AM

    Snow is good a hiding things it objects to...

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  16. the walking manJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:06 AM

    Gah, the only useless thing 'roun here is the dame snow. Lets have some sun and warmth. do you suppose if in the morning we all ran to the east en masse the earth would tilt a bit more towards the sun sooner?

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  17. hedgewitchJanuary 28, 2011 at 9:15 AM

    Thanks everyone for the visits and comments--greatly appreciated.I've enjoyed as always seeing what everyone does with the photo--this mag has been thoroughly fun.

    @ twm Yeah--I'm a lot less tired of snow here since we're one of the few parts of the country that hasn't had any, but I pretty much hate winter anyway on general principals.

    To all the 55-ers--I have to engage in some dreary RL chores today, but I will make the rounds this evening to see what deviltry you all have gotten up to.

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  18. Kathe W.January 28, 2011 at 9:40 AM

    winters snowbals- I like that !

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  19. TALONJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    Just beautiful, hedgewitch.

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  20. SYJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:46 AM

    Nice.. as much as I hate snow.. snow isn't the villian in this story

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  21. Brian MillerJanuary 28, 2011 at 10:59 AM

    nice...nature disturbed, fights back...wish it could with all those that want to destroy it...

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  22. chiccorealJanuary 28, 2011 at 11:33 AM

    Dear Hedgewitch: Definitely feel this angst; the glaring variations between Man vs Nature. As always, most excellent poetry hedgewitchO'theWilds!

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  23. BelindaJanuary 28, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    Beautiful 55.

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  24. RNSANEJanuary 28, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    What a great combination of 55 and magpie. Very well done. I can just see the car, definitely a victim in this winter scene, as, perhaps, it should be!!!

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  25. G-ManJanuary 28, 2011 at 7:52 PM

    This is where we chose to live!
    Whats Winter without Snow!
    Loved your 55 Joy Ann.
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End!!!

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  26. Sue JJanuary 28, 2011 at 8:46 PM

    Anything inorganic seems out of place in snow. Nice take on the prompt.

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  27. ClaudiaJanuary 29, 2011 at 5:57 AM

    "and let their secret world continue
    without my car, my fumes, my noise, my uselessness."
    i just loved this line - yes - i just love this line... have a wonderful weekend!

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  28. gautami tripathyJanuary 29, 2011 at 6:26 AM

    Wonderful take. A pleasure to read.


    zeroing into the arrow

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  29. izzyJanuary 29, 2011 at 7:49 AM

    Uselessness? in snow-against it, maybe- thanks.

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  30. hedgewitchJanuary 29, 2011 at 8:54 AM

    Thanks all, and may your weekends be snow free and excellent.

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  31. magiceyeJanuary 31, 2011 at 1:06 AM

    that was lovely!

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  32. KavitaJanuary 31, 2011 at 1:53 AM

    you know, that was very very realistic.. I am pretty sure that's how the chirpy birds would be thinking about us and our cars...
    I like your point of view here, Joy... all packed into this poignant Magpie!

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  33. MargaretJanuary 31, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    ...and let the secret world continue without ... "us". Love it - I like winter just because it lets me walk in those "thick" areas I can't get to in the other seasons. Great insight.

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  34. AnonymousFebruary 1, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    playful take.
    love your style...

    Thanks for sharing.
    :)

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