Thursday, April 7, 2011

Friday Flash 55 ~ The Cruel Master







The Cruel Master
A Tale of Love and Fear in Rictameter Form
(sort of)


“Come! Now!”
the stern command
wakes her at dawn’s first light.
His eyes, relentless, follow her.
She cringes and whines and rolls belly up.
“Fetch!” say the eyes. She tries  to hide
but she has no choice, it's
obey or else.
“Come! Now!”


She gets up, gets dressed 
and gets the leash.

It's walk time.



April 2011




Rictameter is a syllable-counting form, where syllables per line are as follows: 2 4 6 8 10 8 6 4 2  and the first and last lines must be identical. I’ve added twelve words at the end to provide the requisite 55 for a certain cranky old man.

 

posted for Friday Flash 55 at G-Man’s



Hey--you can't be serious all the time.



Photo: The Pitiful One,  by joy ann jones
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28 comments:

  1. FireblossomApril 7, 2011 at 6:05 PM

    OH you TRICKSTER! I can't bear anybody being mean to animals, and I was reading with a cringe. But then you pulled the old switcheroo! So get the lead out! Walk time, Mom! :-D

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  2. Monkey ManApril 7, 2011 at 6:35 PM

    They do have control over us. Yes they do.

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  3. Ami MattisonApril 7, 2011 at 6:52 PM

    Aw, how cute! Pets can be so demanding. Clever write!

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  4. Sherry Blue SkyApril 7, 2011 at 8:14 PM

    Oh I so love this! I was relieved when I found out she was "only" a human, hee hee, and that no dog had a mean owner.......hilarious!I so know the feeling!

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  5. UnknownApril 7, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    My three have me wrapped around their paws
    nice 55 amiga

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  6. hedgewitchApril 7, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    Thanks, ladies and MM. It's just a silly kinda day; spent most of it gardening and cleaning and my brain is melted. I'm off to veg out--I'll make the 55 rounds in the morning.

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  7. Jannie FunsterApril 7, 2011 at 8:32 PM

    Boy, do I know those relentless eyes! 4 of them in our house. 6, if you include the cat, he likes to join in the walks too. He really does!

    xoxo

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  8. dustusApril 7, 2011 at 8:35 PM

    Aww... cute dog, though so cruel to want to be walked! lol Nice job flipping the script on this one.

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  9. Brian MillerApril 7, 2011 at 8:59 PM

    hehe...yes master...what now master...here's my leash mas- ok really kinda glad we dont have a dog yet...

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  10. patriciacaspersApril 7, 2011 at 9:00 PM

    That's a hard core form there. Nice, funny, work. My dog dances until she's fed/walked/played.

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  11. G-ManApril 7, 2011 at 9:02 PM

    Who commands who?
    Thats rhetorical...hehehehe
    Loved your Beastly 55 Hedgewitch.
    It's about time you 'Lightened-Up'!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Wek-End

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  12. MargaretApril 7, 2011 at 9:09 PM

    Clever and boy, can I relate! 3 dogs EVERY morning = even on "sleep-in" Saturdays...

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  13. MaggieApril 7, 2011 at 9:24 PM

    LOL. He even matches the tile, or the tile matches him...

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  14. AnonymousApril 7, 2011 at 10:25 PM

    clever, you are...made me grateful my pup isn't demanding in that way! btw, thanks for explaining the form... hope to try it~

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  15. Pheromone GirlApril 7, 2011 at 11:31 PM

    I sense a theme this Friday! If mine doesn't get a walk, he's TROUBLE...

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  16. lucychiliApril 8, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    =)

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  17. the walking manApril 8, 2011 at 4:49 AM

    Yea that's exactly how my day begins at 2-4 AM every morning no matter how much or how little sleep I have had. The only difference is the dog can get her own damn leash.

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  18. izzyApril 8, 2011 at 7:18 AM

    Well well- I am glad it wasn't going where I thought...but good 55 !

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  19. BrendanApril 8, 2011 at 7:19 AM

    Sounds like the Voice which drags my ass out of bed before the alarm to get to work here. Not that I don't live for it, but it sucks to be Told what to do. Walking on those reluctant paws with a doleful eye at Pa, Brendan

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  20. Maude LynnApril 8, 2011 at 9:28 AM

    Sounds like my house!

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  21. limeApril 8, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    lord have mercy, i have enough early morning demands with my kids. i couldn't add a dog to the mix and keep my sanity.

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  22. TALONApril 8, 2011 at 10:11 AM

    lol! Loved this, hedgewitch. Charlie and Riley laughed out loud when I read this to them...they know the truth :)

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  23. BubbaApril 8, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    He knows who's boss - LOL! Funny 55!

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  24. gautami tripathyApril 8, 2011 at 12:31 PM

    Good one, this!

    order of the day

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  25. MonaApril 8, 2011 at 1:12 PM

    Pets are more clever than we think :D

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  26. ClaudiaApril 8, 2011 at 1:38 PM

    ha - i had a dog as well - and know exactly what you're talking about...fun 55 :=)

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  27. Shanae BranhamApril 8, 2011 at 6:12 PM

    You've got to feel sorry for the master. Sometimes dogs can be ruthless...my cat woke me up at 3:15 this morning wanting into the house. I really enjoyed this. I am having a great first Flash fiction 55.

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  28. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallApril 9, 2011 at 2:38 PM

    have fun with your pet.

    reflective 55.
    at times, having a pet is a blessing.
    you are blessed.

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"We make out of the quarrel with others, rhetoric, out of the quarrel with ourselves, poetry." ~William Butler Yeats

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