Another offering of two tonight, but I promise not to make a habit of it. I probably should have picked one of these only, as they're very similar, but I thought the contrast in form and non-form might be interesting to some readers. Please don't feel compelled to read both, however. There's a lot of poetry out there to enjoy tonight and I don't want to burn anyone out.
Deadlight
We walked together, your fetch and I
under a dry black moon
in a milk wet sky.
I talked at length to what had no ear.
I talked at length to what had no ear.
Dead light crunched underfoot
in the burning of the year.
To all I asked, its cloud lips were sealed
and its star eyes were filmed
to blank white wheels.
It had no more breath, no more words than a stone
but yet it was better
than walking alone.
~August 2012
Posted for OpenLinkNIght at dVerse Poets Pub
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I rewrote this poem into a syllable-counted, repeat-rhymed Welsh form belatedly for Kerry's Sunday Mini-Challenge:Cyhydedd Hir after seeing so many excellent examples by the participants at Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads. (Mama Zen and Karin Gustafson, in particular, wrote some excellent ones.)
This is how it worked out:
This is how it worked out:
Deadlight Redux
We walked together
in black moon weather
your fetch and I under a milk wet sky.
I talked, each word dear
to what had no ear
in the burning year, under dead light.
Its cloud lips were sealed
its blank eyes white wheels
all I asked, it peeled from my own sighs.
It had no more home,
no more words than stone
yet walking alone's hard by dead lightI attempt to read both iterations below:
Process notes:
fetch (2) — n the ghost or apparition of a living person
(from the online World English Dictionary)
(from the online World English Dictionary)
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Cropped by joyannjones with gratitude and appreciation for the original work, which can be viewed at the link above.
Cropped by joyannjones with gratitude and appreciation for the original work, which can be viewed at the link above.




